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Week 3
This week, after discussion and sharing ouridea, we have come up with our final idea. As a script, I am going to write a script. At first, I have no idea on how to write a professional script.
After searching on the Internet and finding the resource, I have known how to write it in a logical way. I have written 6 pages script alone.
This is the first vision:
CHOOSE
by
An Shuoyu
FADE IN:
EXT. PARK (BAO DING)-DAY
JOE and JANE walk towards hand inhand. JANE smiles.
FADE IN:
EXT. HOSPITAL (BAO DING)-DAY
DOCTOR
Theresult shows that you could not be pregnant anymore because you have anaccident before.
JANE
Oh,dear. Is it the result that we could not have a baby for three years after marriage?
FADE IN:
INT. APARTMENT BUILDING (BAO DING), HALLWAY-NIGHT
JOE and JANE sit in the building and watch TV. It shows that there are children playing in the park happily.
JANE
How lovely they are, but I…
JOE
(looking at JANE and stop her words)
Yeah, I know, we will soon have childrenand then we could take them outside like this.
JANE
(Sign and hesitate)
JOE
(Hug JANE)
FADE IN:
INT. APARTMENT BUILDING (BAO DING), HALLWAY-NIGHT
JOE comes home from work and sprawls on the sofa
JANE
(Takes his hat, coat, tie)
You need to relax tonight, maybe wecould have a good sleep.
JOE
I am tired. Having supper and I want tosleep alone
JANE
(She stands there shaking her head, mutteringto herself)
Oh, no, god. He might be tired of me becauseI could not bear a baby for him.
CUT TO
JOE
(Calls on a girl and talks about thebusiness)
You had better come to my officetomorrow morning and we could…
CUT TO
JANE
(There was a deep frown on her brow)
It’s right and he has a girl outside
FADE IN
INT. APARTMENT BUILDING (BAO DING), BEDROOM-NIGHT
JOE and JANE lying in bed on both sidesof the back to back.
JANE
(In her mind)
I need to go to the temple to worship.
JOE
(In his mind)
The recent work is too busy and I justwant to create a better life for my wife and our future baby. After it goesaway, I need to accompany with my wife.
FADE IN:
EXT. TEMPLE (BAO DING)-DAY
A bonze sits in the temple and prays. The surrounding is quiet andfilled with trees and flowers. The air is fresh.
BONZE
All things follow your heart.
(Burn joss sticks)
JANE
(Look around and goes to the bonze)
How could I choose? What could I do?Could I speak to him in reality but if ….
(Quietly sobbing)
BONZE
All things follow your heart.
(Burn joss sticks and give joss sticksto Jane)
JANE
Jane prays devoutly.
BONZE
Comes back in three days.
Fade in
INT. KITCHEN (BAO DING)-DUSK
JANE
(Cooking and flashes back)
Cut in
EXT. HOSPITAL (BAO DING)-DAY
DOCTOR
You need to think twice. You have a highrisk that you could not burn anymore.
JANE
(Bow meditation, biting her lips)
Come on, I have made my mind.
Cut in
INT. LIVING ROOM (BAO DING)-DUSK
JOE
(Makes a phone call and undresses)
See you next week.
JANE
(Bow meditation, biting her lips, speakto herself)
He must fall in love in another girl andI deserve it because I have done a wrong decision when I am young.
JOE
(Sits in the sofa and watches TV)
Say nothing
JANE
(Wipes away tears, pretending to be calm,flashes back)
CUT IN
INT. KITCHEN (BAO DING)-DUSK
JOE
(Knocks door)
Dear, I am coming
JANE
Wait a moment and we will have supper.
CUT IN
INT. KITCHEN (BAO DING)-DUSK
JANE
(Wipes away tears, pretending to be calm)
Dear, let’s have supper
The surrounding is quiet and they don’t say a word to each other until the end of the supper.
JANE
I want to have a baby so as you.Tomorrow is weekend. Could we please go to the hospital and see the doctor?
JOE
If you want, we could go. It’s up to you.
Fade in
EXT. HOSPITAL (BAO DING)-DAY
Joe and Jane go to the hospital and have a check.
JOE
Do you want to watch a movie?
JANE
Oh, sorry. I have something to dealwith. Next time, I will go with you.
CUT TO
EXT. TEMPLE (BAO DING)-NOON
Jane comes back to see the bonze because she is nervous about theresult from the hospital. The bonze sits in the temple and prays. Thesurrounding is quiet and filled with trees and flowers. The air is fresh.
BONZE
All things follow your heart.
(Burn joss sticks)
JANE
(Look around and goes to the bonze)
We just go to the hospital and have acheck. I don’t know how to face him when the results coming.
(Quietly sobbing)
BONZE
All things follow your heart. Just doyourself and live your wonderful life. You will have a good luck.
(Burn joss sticks and give joss sticksto Jane)
DISSOLVE TO
EXT. TEMPLE (BAO DING)-DUSK
Jane has just stepped out of the temple when her cell phone rings
Doctor (Voice Over)
It was an erroneous judgement before.You will have a baby after taking medicine for a while.
FADE OUT
After discussing with our team, I have modified it.
This is my second vision:
CHOOSE
by
An Shuoyu
FADE IN:
EXT. PARK (BAO DING)-NIGHT
JOE and JANE walk towards hand inhand and goes to home. They enjoy the time.
FADE IN:
INT. APARTMENT BUILDING (BAO DING), HALLWAY-NIGHT
（Displaythe scene by reflecting different objects, eg. The autodyne of themselves, thewishing bottles, flower arrangement and so on.）
JOE
(sees onephoto and thinks)
What ifa baby join us, it will be a warm moment.
JANE
(Lookdown at her stomach)
FADE IN:
EXT. HOSPITAL (BAO DING)-DAY
DOCTOR（MCU）
Theresult shows that you could not be pregnant anymore because you have anaccident before.
JANE (Voice Over)
(Clench the lips and lower herhead with laboratory sheet in hand)
JANE walks out of the hospital with hermind is confused and aimless. There comes one person who gives out the ads topeople. JANE takes one which says come to “Quiet light” Temple, you will becomeyourself without annoyance.
JANE
(Contemptuousof the ads, but takes it because there is no rubbish bin around)
FADE IN:
INT. APARTMENT BUILDING (BAO DING), HALLWAY-NIGHT
JANE comes back and throws the ads on the table randomly.
She eats chips at home with the innersurface is heartless. Her heart is lonely and she just want to eat the thingsto kill time because she is bored and upset.
JANE sits in the building and watch TV. It shows that there arechildren playing in the park happily.
JANE (Voice Over)
How lovely they are, but I…
(Sob)
Joe comes back from work and opensthe door himself. JANE hears the sound of the door and suddenly sees a singlelaboratory which she takes from the hospital in the corner of the table. Assoon as the man steps into the house, she rubs and hides it quickly in herpocket.
Joe
(Looksat JANE without mood, and doesn’t notice the scene, sprawls on the sofa)
JANE
(Takes his hat, coat, tie, a littlenervous because of the former moment)
Eh, well, You need to relax tonight,maybe we could have a good sleep.
JOE
I am tired because of work. Havingsupper and I want to sleep alone
JANE
(She stands there shaking her head,muttering to herself)
（Throw the potato chips to the table）
CUT TO
JOE
(Answers a phone call from his assistantand talks about the business)
You had better come to my office tomorrowmorning and we could…
CUT TO
JANE (Voice Over)
(There was a deep frown on her brow)
Has he already known…?
(Nervous, clenches her lips with her handson the lab list in your pocket)
FADE IN
INT. APARTMENT BUILDING (BAO DING), BEDROOM-NIGHT
JOE and JANE lying in bed on both sidesof the back to back.
JANE
(In her mind)
I need to go to the temple to worship.
JOE
(In his mind)
The recent work is too busy. Afterthis period goes away, I need to accompany with my wife.
(hugs JANE, but JANE has already slept)
FADE IN
INT. APARTMENT BUILDING (BAO DING), LIVING ROOM-DAY
JANE cleans the desk. Joe has already gone to work. Behind thatquietness her nerves are jangling, she's in a terrible state. Then she sees theads which she takes yesterday from the street.
JANE (Voice Over)
Maybe it could help me.
(Smile, but still worried)
FADE IN:
EXT. TEMPLE (BAO DING)-DAY
A bonze sits in the temple and prays. The surrounding is quiet andfilled with trees and flowers. The air is fresh.
BONZE
All things follow your heart.
(Burns joss sticks)
JANE
(Looks around and goes to the bonze)
How could I choose? What could I do?Could I speak to him in reality but if ….
(Quietly sobbing)
BONZE
All things follow your heart.
(Burns joss sticks and gives joss sticksto JANE)
JANE
(Prays devoutly)
BONZE
Comes back in three days.
Fade in
INT. KITCHEN (BAO DING)-DUSK
JANE
(Cooking and flashes back)
Cut in
EXT. HOSPITAL (BAO DING)-DAY
DOCTOR
You need to think twice. You have a highrisk that you could not be pregnant anymore.
JANE
(Bow meditation, biting her lips)
Come on, I have made my mind.
Cut in
INT. LIVING ROOM (BAO DING)-DUSK
JOE
(Makes a phone call and undresses. JANEcomes to help him with the clothes, but JOE is too busy calling to payattention on JANE which accidentally hits her without any notice)
Well,so be it，Talk with me faceto face next week.
JANE
(Bows meditation, talks to herself，staring at one side: innocent,bewildered)
JOE
(Sits in the sofa and watches TV)
Say nothing
JANE
(Wipes away tears, pretending to be calm,flashes back)
CUT IN
INT. KITCHEN (BAO DING)-DUSK
JOE
(Knocks door)
Dear, I am back.
JANE
Wait a moment and we will have supper.
CUT IN
INT. KITCHEN (BAO DING)-DUSK
JANE
(Wipes away tears, pretending to be calm)
Dear, let’s have supper.
The surrounding is quiet and they don’t say a word to each other untilthe end of the supper.
JANE, JOE
Do you have time tomorrow?
JANE
Tomorrow is weekend. Could we please goto the hospital and see the doctor?
Fade in
EXT. HOSPITAL (BAO DING)-DAY
Joe and Jane go to the hospital and have a check.
JOE
(Half tilt)
It’s rarely to have a weekend together. Let’swatch a movie and then comes back to take the report.
JANE
Oh, sorry. I have something to dealwith. Next time, I will go with you.
CUT TO
EXT. TEMPLE (BAO DING)-NOON
Jane comes back to see the bonze because she is nervous about theresult from the hospital. The bonze sits in the temple and prays like that day.The surrounding is quiet and filled with trees and flowers. The air is fresh.
BONZE
All things follow your heart.
(Burn joss sticks)
JANE
(Look around and goes to the bonze)
We just go to the hospital and have acheck. I don’t know how to face him when the results coming.
(Quietly sobbing)
BONZE
All things follow your heart. Just doyourself and live your wonderful life. You will have a good luck.
(Burn joss sticks and give joss sticksto Jane)
DISSOLVE TO
EXT. TEMPLE (BAO DING)-DUSK
Jane has just stepped out of the temple when her cell phone rings
Doctor (Voice Over)
It was an erroneous judgement before.You will have a baby after taking medicine for a while.
FADE OUT
Key Principles and Strategies
1、The setting of roles:
Shape the figure by the pressureof the plot and event. It was indicated that the violent of the character'sinner conflict, personal conflict, social conflicts and environmental conflictswould be increased depth with the increase of pressure. And the choice of thecharacter will be closer to his nature. the characters need to compare andcontrast. The character will develop gradually under the pressure of continuousdevelopment which leads to “Character Arc”, that is, the spirit of the track,such as the method which was used in Zootropolis.
2、The commercializationof the film:
It can be said that the capitalcan improve the quality of films. The effective implantation of advertisementsin films is not only the goal of promoting film brands in the commodity market,but also creates a balance among film、audience、producersunder the circumstances of not destroying the plot, without destroying theatmosphere of the film, so that the commercial operation of the film will gomore smoothly. We could communicate with a brand and get some profit, forexample, the appearance of the product is a prop which is suitable for the developmentof the plot of the film.
After watching many films and analyzing them, I found that the implantation of advertisements in my film is not only adopts thetraditional methods of setting up lines and props, but also need to be innovative, and that is commercial tourism scene implantation. The shot scene,the attractive plot could cause an upsurge of travel to the place.
3、The name of the film:
I think the name of the film representsthe image of the film. Directors should learn the commercialization of filmimages. These two films could both use image to add advertising implants, Infact, it is also the construction of this short narrative film brand. Like themost classical movie named “If You Are The One”, my narrative film also has"sincerity" in the name. For example, in the first film, it contains father'spursuit of the happiness to the son and the sincerity of the film itself, whichlet the audience remember I have a sincere heart in the film. Therefore, inthis short narrative film, we should not only pay attention to the relationshipbetween the image of the film and the plot of the film, but also pay attention to the film which should have an intriguing name, soas to capture theaudience's psychology.
4、The structure arrangement of the film:
(1) Begin with a tense emotional state. Tension often draws attention. The nervousness of other people will bring our curiosity to the top. In the film, I will design a scene which the son stay alone at home and a strange phone rings.
(2) Add the anxiety in the film. Most of us don’t like anxiety, butthey are willing to see other people in an anxious situation according to the study.
(3) Hostility will also attracts our attention. The change of the attitudefrom loveto hostility towards the boy to his new parents in the second film in another world. It could attract our sight.
Based on it, at the beginning, I will use a variety of emotions withthe camera which simulating the audience's perspective.
Maintain the tension and continue it. Using “Not only” to develop thestory. This would help to upgrade the tensity of the story.
Increase gradually. Using” Not only…But also…”. Besides, don't worryabout the tension convert to other roles beyond the hero will have a bad effecton the body. In order to highlight the tension between father and son, therelationship between children and new parents, I will continue to transfer the stress.
Tighten it again. Then add a small turning point.
Some unusual and stunned things happen. Solve the problem and the tone of the tense tone begin to decrease and weaken.
5、The conduct propaganda of the film：
During the exchange and discussionwith customers, the use of fixed phrases will improve efficiency. It canhighlight the important part and attract investors' attention. Besides, theywill make our communication between each other happily and fluently which wouldbenefit for the birth of a new narrative film.
In conclusion, there may be onlyone story text, but the narrative way of telling the story is not restrictedthat can be used for any innovation. The story could be simple, but it needs totouch people. And the biggest part of the secret of short narrative film liesin the word "nervous"". The main content of the script’s techniqueis to produce, maintain, suspend, intensify and relieve tension. The creationand completion of a narrative film, not like a painting or a novel which oftenconceived and created by a single person, but a collective project and a team.For example, the structure of the novel is not important, and readers can alsounderstand the novel in a random way. While the movie, the story structure mustbe very strict, to fit it. Besides, from the narrative conception tothe last,the film will put on the market, that is why we need to consider adding thecommercial elements in the film.
